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Post by Typhon Purifier 89 on Feb 22, 2011 15:38:43 GMT -5
....Part I of chapter 7! Run! Horrifying Reunion! Attachments:
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Post by Servbot42 on Feb 22, 2011 23:34:16 GMT -5
Alright, let's do this.
Chapter 6
Right off the bat, I looked up the name. Nice way in keeping with the Bonne's affinity for German names that have specific meaning to the machine.
lol I love Tron's romantic debts for Megaman.
Slap him? Dirty girl, dirty girl. And she doesn't mean his face, I'm sure.
Where do they keep all their brains? Ew, Ira.
Bonne Industries. I like it.
Bleucher nudged Barrel in the ribs? Bleucher's pretty tall and Barrel is short and hunched over. That must have been an interesting process to watch.
These parts with Servbot 42 are bizarre - yet flattering! - to read.
How do you think the Bonnes know German words and phrases?
Bleucher must know Gramps well to detect anything in those horrible green robot eyes of his.
As if I really care about the air supply for meat-bags!
I approve of Sera's new demeanor.
Elysium is an asshole. Just let them out of the damn room.
"Die." I love Tron.
Oh, my antics amuse me.
I suppose it removes any tension, but I still thought the part where Tron inexplicably smashes her head off the ceiling was hilarious.
Done. This was a good chapter, no complaints. Had a few moments that I loved, I liked the tension on Elysium prior to Roll and Tron showing up. Beyond that I was just interested to see what would happen next, so I'll have to read chapter 7 soon!
But until then...
Let's see, is there anything I wanted to see resolved? Beyond knowing how all the time lines connect, I can't really think of anything else. Of course if I do I'll bring it up.
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Post by Typhon Purifier 89 on Feb 22, 2011 23:39:47 GMT -5
Haha I love your responses! I wish I could just tell u how things will go... But it will ruin it haha. Read the newest chapter before u sign off!! It's not too bad!!
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Post by Typhon Purifier 89 on Feb 22, 2011 23:46:26 GMT -5
Oh btw, 42 and cere, someof the things you guys have said and pointed out really make me laugh, as I was planning on instigating a few ideas before you even said them. That said, I think you are both going to like what's coming....
Chapter 7 Run!
Part II: 42's Finest Hour!
Hahah
So u need to read part 1 now, 42!!!
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Post by Cere on Feb 22, 2011 23:59:56 GMT -5
Just wanted to let you know that I read Part 1. I was hoping to save the majority of it for another time when I'm bored, but the eagerness to find out what happens next got the better of me and I ended up finishing it. But I plan to reread it before attempting a review.
Glad you're enjoying the feedback, Typhon.
(Edit: My review's been delayed by some last minute assignments. XP)
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Post by Typhon Purifier 89 on Mar 24, 2011 11:16:42 GMT -5
Yeah... so... sorry I haven't updated in a while... I'm just really focusing on one of my classes at the moment, and every time I would sit down to actually write this, a nagging little voice in my head always gets me to stop and go figure out why airplanes fly (Physics lol). So yeah... I'll get there.... I'm sorry I haven't logged on in a while... I bet no one even noticed, seeing as how that seems to be the trend on the boards lol
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Post by Servbot42 on Mar 24, 2011 12:59:28 GMT -5
My fears have been realized! Every day I've been waiting for you to come back so that my guilt over not getting around to reviewing the latest chapter could come full circle. I was going to, but I held it off and the more I held it off the guiltier I felt, and the longer I waited I thought of how bizarre it would be to randomly put up my review weeks later with you not even being around and it's just been gathering in this ball of wretched emotional trauma...
So suffice it to say, I noticed. And I will definitely do some reviewing soon. I've got a night class that I need to worry about at the moment though, so later tonight or tomorrow.
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Post by Servbot42 on Apr 1, 2011 0:00:46 GMT -5
So, uh, here's that review! Better late than never I guess...
lol Stomping Tron. (Oh, right. She's in the Gustaff. Well it was still a great mental image - Roll and Ira casually walking with Tron aggressively stomping down the hall.)
Waaaiiiit. You say Tron stomps in the Gustaff, but then, after the fight with the Zakobons you say she floats. Agh, and then you say Tron tromped! Just what kind of Gustaff are we dealing with here?
Ah, the infamous crotch plate was mentioned. Since darker themes will be breached in this, perhaps there will be a dark history behind it?
Done~
Good. Once the two groups met up I couldn't stop reading due to the suspense. I enjoyed the reunion and how it was obviously not at all what Tron or Roll hoped it would be. The description of Sera as a "large" ancient was somewhat perplexing to me though.
Not much else to say except that you're doing a great job and I am excited to see the next entry...whenever that may be.
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Post by Typhon Purifier 89 on Apr 2, 2011 1:21:47 GMT -5
and.... for actually giving me a review you jerk lol I didn't read it yet, I'm just gonna put this on first... I actually was really busy, so I finished this chapter tonight... but it was also partly due to the fact that this chapter was just a hill I had to surmount... Everyone has made the "get trigger back down" stories, so I tried to make it interesting, but I think I'm past that now, so I think I'll be more willing to write haha edit: I read your review... it was short... lol Tron "Floats" because she was using the booster she installed. You don't remember her doing that when you fight her in the Saul Kada ruins? That actually is pretty important for the second part of this chapter... you will see why... and it will make YOU in particular cry lol... Hm.. I guess I never really thought about there being anything TO the infamous crotch plate other than the fact that Tron wears weird shit sometimes... I could do something with that maybe... I kinda like writing the character interaction parts way more than the action parts. I mean, how many ways can you describe "Buster shoots, stuff blows up, yelling screaming!" In fact, I think I'm gonna do something cool with Roll's parents... I was actually planning on it from the beginning, but I tweaked a little bit... Gonna be really interesting for Roll in particular. Alot of angst for her I'm sure lol. Just as a heads up, a bit of foreshadowing probably a little bit down the road. Teisel is freaking awesome, don't underestimate him. That's all... lol Attachments:
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Post by MikΣy on Apr 2, 2011 3:13:02 GMT -5
Got through with ch. 7. All I can say is that I was highly impressed with the transition from tension into poetry. I bet 42 may like it as well.  ah yeah, might I add: giant bricks ftw. |
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Post by Typhon Purifier 89 on Apr 3, 2011 20:20:52 GMT -5
I wish more people read Legends fics... it seriously seems like there is no fan base to them... I keep coming on to all the sites it on, looking for reviews, and it sucks!
Oh well... Maybe when its actually done people will read the whole thing.. I'm not a fan of starting something and then not being able to finish it because it isn't finished yet...
Harry Potter for instance....
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Post by Typhon Purifier 89 on Apr 5, 2011 0:52:18 GMT -5
Have a large portion of chapter 8 done... I'm not entirely sure this chapter is necessary for ANYONE on this board. I mean, it really just explains what Megaman was on Elysium to all the people that didn't already know, like Roll and Tron... but don't skip it. I have a few surprises, a few laughs, the introduction of Aero into the story (She's canon now!! lol) and a big surprise at the end...
You know what I think I need? Some form of a Beta... You know, someone who reads the story before I post it, with a critical eye... Of course, if I did that, I might just let them in on what I have planned for the whole story, see what they think... I kinda wanna do this for two reasons.
1. It would be awesome to see if someone would think this was as cool of an idea as I do, when it's all done
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2. So that SOMEONE knows what the storyline I wanted would be BEFORE the 3rd game came out, JUST in case I had some things right, or some characterizations spot on, so that way I could say that I thought of it BEFORE CAPCOM did, which would be hilarious.
I know, I'm dumb... I just find this to be a fun way of speculating about the game
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Post by NeoSpearBlade on Apr 12, 2011 21:09:30 GMT -5
Why is my username all smallcaps?...I'm not entirely sure this chapter is necessary for ANYONE on this board. I mean, it really just explains what Megaman was on Elysium to all the people that didn't already know, like Roll and Tron... but don't skip it. That's interesting to me. Yes, I'm being told something I already know but if it's told to other characters, what's gonna be their reaction? IMO, I wanna see Roll and Tron's reactions after being told what Yuna and Sera told X-I mean, Megaman about Elysium's legacy, the instant biblical flood caused by refractors and Elysium's crash course to Earth. the introduction of Aero into the story (She's canon now!! lol) ....Every single time I see her, all I can think of is 'plot device.' No disrespect but something about her just doesn't sit well with me. Still, I am curious on what you will do with her. I just find this to be a fun way of speculating about the game All I want to speculate is when are they going to release the first 2 games on XBLA in HD and when will MML3 get a console port. (Yes, I'm hopeless. No need to tell me.  )
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Post by Typhon Purifier 89 on Apr 13, 2011 9:38:11 GMT -5
Well I think that u will find that it isn't going to be quite what you expect. I'll actually talk more about other things, and I think for the actual explanation to the other characters, it isn't really necessary that they understand everything about the past. I think they should sort of learn it on their own, or if they ask Megaman alone. The big exposition was for the readers enjoyment. Doing it all again would be ridiculous, so I'm not going to.
As for Aero... It's funny, I know how she is going to be in this story, an how things will be with her, an it's funny, I kind of like her. Girl stuck in a rough position. You will see what I mean. As to her being a plot device... I mean... Isn't everyone? Lol I mean.... Megaman is a plot device, and so is tron. In fact, I'm sure if people knew ahead of time that a bunch of pirates were going to be in a Megaman game, led by a spas cute burnette 14 year old girl, they probably would have been pissed then too. "that isn't supposed to be in Megaman! Where are the robots?! Blah blah blah". To advance the plot, u may need to add a few things, you know? Including another cute girl to love Megaman. Lol. I love how mml is turning into a harem anime. All these girls... Lol
But yeah, obviously I'll have to go over Elysium crashing into terra with everyone. Its a tad plot important haha, but as for learning about Megaman. Thts what this whole story is.
But I wanna make one freaking thing clear, cause there were, like, a million reviews talking about how super awesome amazing it will be when trigger turns back into x, or how x will react to the new world.
No.
No.
NO... Trigger was x at some point, but not anymore. He knows nothing about x, who he was. He is Megaman volnutt, and people keep making assumptions that x is just suddenly gonna appear and fuck everything up. No. X will be very important for Megaman learning about himself, but honestly, he thing you really need to understand is that this story's main final focus will be classic. Not x. And when Megaman finally learns everything, then there will be one, final amazing obstacle to overcome. I don't like how people keep saying that this is some sort of "resetting trigger to x" then watching x run around like a dumba$$ and tron and roll not seeing the old Megaman that they used to love. Nothing changes the past, it is what it is, and when people magically revert after so much change I think is ooc.
Whatever. You will see. This chapter is a little longer than the others... Not quite finished, I'm working on it
Btw not really directing all that at u neo, more at the guy who keeps reviewing saying x is his favorite incarnation of Megaman. Well, he isn't mine, Sooo.... Lol
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Post by SIMSteven on Apr 13, 2011 9:58:50 GMT -5
In picking up what I can catch here by what you've been posting about, this is exactly why I don't read fanfics. It's too much straying from what's canon.
I mean, Elpizo KILLED X's inactive body in MMZ2 although X's spirit still remained as a Cyber Elf. It's also kinda like how Zero killed his original body in MMZ3 but his Cyber Elf spirit was in the body we play as.
This is just one example of what I'm talking about in the whole "straying from canon" thing I was talking about.
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