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Post by Cere on Oct 4, 2012 0:02:15 GMT -5
If we can't have a new game about this pair who had so much potential, we might as well write stories about them. I'll be reading this one for sure when I find the time.
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Post by Cere on Oct 5, 2012 22:56:16 GMT -5
So I read all the chapters in two sittings. Great job with the pacing. There aren't any dull moments thanks to character interaction, and lots of action scenes. Actually, your pacing in this story is blazing fast, which is the reason I could skim it quickly. After all the snail paced, close readings I have to do for school, your story was really refreshing. The writing seems to be less polished than in your other stories I've read, but I think I actually like it better this way. Simplicity suits Legends best. I like how utterly unconditional the Bright Batz care for each other. Their characters are somewhat generic, but their personalities won me over. Sweet characters like that, you certainly don't see every day. Oh, and was that a Haruhi kick by Barrett in the first chapter? www.youtube.com/watch?v=Sp5dfwEsvtoEdit: Oh yeah, almost forgot. Good job on making Gonzo a dislikable character for framing the Bright Bratz yet making him the much needed bad guy (so far) in your story. It's funny that he might be right about the Bright Batz' involvement in Barrel's disappearance if I'm right that Barrel's been turned into a ferret, hmm.
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